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Four Small Words

Four small words I'll never hear, that haunt me everyday
They twist me and they break me in each and every way
Four small words that I long for, that keep me from my sleep
They've killed me on the inside so all I do is weep
Four small words that I must hear, lest I die alone
And emptiness is all thats left to dwell inside these bones
Four small words, but no one cares, and if one does, then who?
The four small words that break my heart "I love you too"
©2007-2009 ~poordude1089
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Author's Comments

This was something that I wrote almost 2 years ago, before i had anyone special in my life, when i was really emo. it makes me sad that i was once in the mindstate to write this, but i think someone on here will like it, or more like i hope

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:iconthelonepower:
Aw... well u know wat?

i like it. *hugglez*

and guess wat?
not to mention that i lost the game, "i love u 2" ^_^

:glomp:

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:iconcyberphantom:
I like it. The rhyming scheme works well, and it doesn't feel awkward. If you were considering a redraft, I'd advise looking a little at the rhythm of the poem - there are just a few points where you have to jump gaps in the beats...but you're probably done and dusted with this poem now. And it gets its point across nicely.

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Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind - Dr. Seuss

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